I'd change the spokesperson

perhaps make it so that the person dresses in a more professional manner and see him applying the deodorant

there's a small echo. Don't record in a bathroom.

I like the organic nature of it, but I'm thinking if it was a bit more flashy it would get more people interested.

Tell me more about how it works and why. Show me demonstrations. The more explanation thats easy to understand the better.

The actor seemed a bit stilted and could be a bit more charismatic. The video quality could be a bit better. Maybe use some sound effects or music to help keep people interested.

I think it can be better if the actor can demonstrate use, describe the feeling and scent, have more animated movements, and maybe a different setting.

I feel the words that our captions are too big maybe make models smaller. it's too distracting

I think the video needs to be more descriptive and I would not lead with telling people how bad their current deodorant is but rather the benefits of this product or comparison.

show the person using applying it, show the product image clearly

I think you are underestimating how much time and attention people give a facebook video. You need to communicate your brand name and it's core message immediately (like in a second or two). You probably need to make sure it is done visually because in all likelihood people will not see your message with sound on.

I would have the man cover up his chest, I think he’s showing too much skin. I also don’t like the use of the word “squirt”, it makes me uncomfortable.

Perhaps you can say why it works and why it is better than what we are currently using. This does not tell me anything but that it is good and how to use it.

I can't think of anything to change because the product is very unique and original. I like that the description is part of the video. I think that just being unique and original is enough to drive people to the website to find out more about it.

The background makes the product seem a bit less professional. It looks like it was filmed in a school with those concrete blocks. Maybe use a screen or something?

Perhaps promote some type of deal/sale for the product. Promote a free sample. If product is as good as you say it is, people need to experience it and will be sold.

The video need more enthusiasm. Take the rob off and have no shirt on or wear a shirt. I don't like the robe or the color of the robe for the ad. Don't say whala/wala (sp). I don't have a problem with it but, I think you should take out the hanging earring or put one in that isn't hanging. The video needs to take up more of the screen. It's looks small like from an app. Record it in a different angle. Don't say luckily for you and don't say smell your arm pits. Keep working on it. I barely see your product even after watching four times. Show the product longer and have the name on the screen in bright color or at least your logo and colors to make people remember it. I finally saw it white and blue. I guess that is why the robe color. Get a tank top that color maybe.

It might come across better if the spokesperson were finishing up some activity that caused sweat and odor, showing his embarassment and wish for a product that could help. Then show how things improved for him while doing the same activity after having used NOMOBO. Also, if he doesn't say it, it should be noted with onscreen type that this product is free of Aluminum Chloride, Parabens, Phthalates, and Artificial Fragrances. I've found across social media that those ingredients are the ones people seem to be most concerned about not having on their skin. This is something to boast about! Instead of his saying it, I think it would be best if the information appeared in bulleted format, one ingredient after another, slowly appearing on screen. Maybe even having the information flash, to draw attention to it.

1. Change the background to something more interesting, eye-catching, and visually appealing than a white tile wall.2. Change the text color to make it stand out better, or just change the text color of certain words to highlight the most important parts of the message.

The model in the video is obnoxious, ugly, and no one wants to see his or anyone else's bare chest. This ad has no credibility and is painful to watch. You could not do worse if you tried. Even just the raw information animated would be 1000x better than watching some rapey man in the shower.