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|141 Responses to Option A|
Sounds more interesting.
This makes the premise of the book clear to me.
B is too abstract.
It has more intrigue. The second paragraph in Option B doesn't give any information to the relation to the main character.
more appealing, more interesting, makes me want to read more than choice b
Option A is more engaging and interesting. Option B starting point does not catch my eye
Sounds very interesting!
Option A sounds more interesting. It makes me more likely to want to read it.
Option A sounds more interesting. Option B didn't say anything about the money-laundering, lies, and deadly secrets. Option A makes me want to know more about the story.
In Option B, the description of mostly the setting doesn't make it sound as interesting as Option A. Option A offers more insight into the plot, and you get a better idea of the kind of book you will be reading.
The words "wrinkled heartbeat" matches option A more as the ending of the story is about a heartbeat (life) being jeopardized.
Option B provides little to no intrigue and mystery while Option B provides both of these reasonably well.
I chose option A because it seems to be a little more descriptive and gives me a better idea of the story. The information it contains is more relevant to quick synopsis.
Option A just does not flow. Odd wording in the first sentence, but it has FAR more intrigue than option B. B seems to be a real estate ad.
The opening paragraph is more attention grabbing
It implies there will be some action. The other one sounds less exciting.
Option A is the best because it provides a little more entertaining type detail in a way that makes the book sound interesting. Option B sounds more dry like the book is mostly about military and metaphors. I think this might hinder sales of the book.
Short paragraphs feel more direct and engaging. The final question is intriguing.
Option A seems more inviting to the imagination. Option B seems somewhat boring in it's description.
Sounds interesting and informative
A is more suspenseful and makes the book sound more interesting. B doesn't inspire the interest in the book that A does
it is much more interesting and intriguing.
Definitely more intriguing
tells a little more about the plot and less about the locale
Its's more interesting this way. The other blurb kind of gave me the lost feeling.
They're both similar but I think option A adds a bit more to make me want to read the book while B seems just to describe.
Gives a clearer description of the main character the likely antagonist.
B is too wordy.
Seems to have more action a allure and any other one also seems like something that can keep my attention
I LIKE THIS ONE BEST
Option A gets me more interested and is far more intriguing.
A is concise and clear. B doesn't seem to transition from first sentence to second as logically.
Neither is very clear but this one is the better of the two.
The focus on the war hero's lies and secrets makes "Blurb" A sound more exciting and intriguing. It gives just a little bit of background without giving too much away, and ropes you in at the start with the promise of mystery and intrigue.
I think it's more clear
Opening with old war hero is more captivating instead of the seemingly coy sales pitchy ...generous offer.
it makes me want to read this book
Although Option A seems to be a bit cliche, I would say that it reads a bit more smoothly. It is easier to focus on compared to Option B. I would even go as far to say that Option A gives the reader more of an idea of what might be going on as well.
Option A creates more suspense for the reader.
It's more intriguing and less confusing.
It's more dramatic and suspenseful.
I think this choice gives the reader a sense of mystery and excitement. Choice B sounds more like a history book and may appeal to less people.
The right side is more exciting and makes me want to read more. However, I did want to point out that the last should have a period or an exclamation point at the end.
There are serious problems with both options - neither sounds written by a human being; they sound slightly scrambled/altered by a machine. Option A is more gripping; this version of the summary is definitely less tedious than option B. Option A, however, needs to be checked for grammar consistency. Why does it end with a question mark?
Choice a grabbed me from the beginning. I think this will get more people to read the book.
Scandal is more interesting.
This blurb is much more eye-catching and interesting than choice B
This 'blurb' just seems overall to be more interesting and more appealing to me.
it is more descriptive
Sounds more intriguing
Makes it sound more fast paced and mysterious.
Option B seems to make the story more military based
Option A has all of what I find interesting in a story. Its got crime, drama, death, illegal activity. It just sounds like a very captivating story.
Option A is more intriguing. However, it shouldn't end in a question mark, as written.
sounds more intriguing
It tells you more about the plot of the book and makes it sound more exciting.
This one is more intriguing. It makes me want to read the book more than the other statement.
sounds more intriguing, makes me more likely to be interested in reading
I feel like option A does.
This sounds the most exciting! I would like to include the bit about it being in FL though.
Last sentence in option A draws readers in more with intrigue.
A sounded more interesting. B sounded dry and boring.
I think Option A's "blurb" is more attention grabbing! Readers will be very excited to read a book with that kind of an introduction. Option B's "blurb" was just as good. But, I think Option A's blurb will get more attention, than Option B.
Because it features information of both an old man ("wrinkled") and speaking on life and death ("heartbeats").
a better description, sounds much more promising as far as drama
Makes it sound slightly more interesting.
This option sounds better
There's nothing to grab your attention with Option B. Option A on the other hand is quite intriguing. Definitely go with A.
Tells me more about what I can expect and the characters, I'm intrigued.
option A grabbed me from the start.
Blurb A creates a lot of mystery and intrigue. B is very matter of fact and doesn't grab one's attention as well.
Choice A seems more exciting and action packed. I would read a book with this description.
The three initial descriptions sound get your attention more quickly than B. The twist with the person hired to kill him sounds interesting as well.
Choice A seems intriguing, with some good questions for a mystery.
It sounds more interesting and goes well with the title more than the first option. It gives more detail and sounds like it leads to an interesting twist of tales.
much more suspense
It reads easier than option B. Very clear what the book is about.
A sounded better to me. I didn't care that the house was in Florida or the metaphor. that was in example B
Sounds more interesting.
Option A's blurb is much more detailed and writen in a way that grabs my attention. Option B seems forced, like the author didn't really know what to say.
It's more to the point and lets the reader know what the story is about.
Option A is more descriptive and catches your attention more than Option B. It makes you curious and wonder what happens. After reading it, it made me want to read the book to find out what happens.
sounds more interesting
I think choice A just leaves the reader with more sense of suspense. I don't know that I'd end it in a question mark though...
I am more interested in A than B.
Option A was more ear grabbing to me and made me want to know more.
Very suspenseful description which makes me want t read more
More narrative, fits better for a novel.
option A makes me want to read the book. i just don't care for the other one.
More descriptive. The reference to a military retreat in B really has nothing to do with it.
B is so unclear.
Option A draws you in a lot more than Option B - it's a lot more suspenseful and makes you want to see why the person sent to kill him might want to help save him.
Option A flows better. Makes the point of the story clearer.
Option A sounds a little more exciting and could incite someone to want to read the contents of the book.
because its seems more realistic and this suites the book just right.
It seems more personable and relaxed.
I prefer A. It caught my interest and made me curious about the book. B...not so much. B sounds more like a "guy" story while A sounds more interesting to a female. My opinion anyhow!
Option A is my choice. It adds sometime to the intrigue of the story and makes me want to read the book. Who wants to kill this guy and is he/she willing to turn around and save his life?
Makes it sound more dramatic and suspenseful. Hint's at plot points but doesnt spoil.
Option B isnt clear, and is confusing.
Sounds more suspenseful
A gives a very good precis of what the book is about and invites you in to read more (I want to read more, anyway!) B is a bit stiff, IMHO.
It sounds more intriguing.
I like the phrasing and how it ends in a question. It seems more personal, like the story is about the people, not the offer on the home.
Draws me in more than the other and makes me want to read the book.
sounds more exciting
I like the way this is broken up better
Option A is better written and easier to understand.
This one sounds much more exciting
makes it seem more interesting. option B doesnt catch my attention
Choice A sounds more mysterious and more likely to entice someone to read the book. It has a lot more buzzwords that attract attention
The other option made my eyes glaze over.
Option A creates more intrigue and is a better header bc it makes me want to read the book a lot more than option B
Option B is too wordy, it makes it hard to read and comprehend.
This blurb definitely caught my attention. It's even got me interested in the book already. B just seems generic.
This other option leaves me wondering what they are talking about. My choice is much clearer.
More exciting--leads up to the person hired to kill him instead of just saying it at first. Makes the book appear more interesting.
Option A is about circumstances that everybody can relate to. For option B, I don't know anything about Marine Corps history or Palm Beaches, so the second part doesn't resonate with me.
Very detailed on what this book is about. A great selection of words that grabs my attention and makes me want to read this book.
I think this one has a better cliff-hanger/hook.
The blurb is a little vague leaving me wanting more.
It gives more information about the story. The other one is a little vague.
More catching with the first sentence. The first sentence f B is boring
it starts off more interesting with words that grab your attention
There's more mystery in A.
Option A is MUCH more compelling, interesting, and INTRIGUING! I'd sure want to learn more on that one!!!
This one makes it sound like a fast paced, page turning thriller.
I like A because it is more descriptive. I have a strong idea of what the book is about.
Sounds more exciting
it seems like a mystery. you get involved in the story and you want to know what happens next. it draws you in.
The way option b starts out is a little confusing. I had to re-read it to fully understand it.
Talking about the war hero vs the offer is more appealing.
The sentences in A are more succinct. B begins with a run-on sentence that will lose most people after the first few words.
I prefer option A because it offers a better feel of what the story is about and offers more mystery and intrigue.
Option A, better grabs my attention and sets the stage for the book.
|59 Responses to Option B|
Option B sounds more like a blurb, and is more appealing.
Option B makes it intriguing without giving away too much.
Well, first, Option A is awkwardly worded and punctuated. Is the last sentence really a question? Second, Option B mentions the Marine Corps will which catch a lot of people's attention as the MC are a very respected institution.
B seems more action packed
B has better flow.
Option B is better because Option A gives too much away.
Option B makes more sense
i like this one
Easier to understand.
Seems more grammatically correct. The first one ends in a question, but it's not really a question.
When I read the location (*Florida), and the details that it is a Marine Corps military retreat and the fact it is a metaphor, I feel like I have more of a grasp on what the book will be about. In Option A, I didn't like that it ended with a question either, when I didn't feel I had enough information for the question to be intriguing to me.
A is too cliche.
This one sounds more interesting and attention grabbing.
Why is there a question mark at the end of A?
I dislike the the question at the end of A and believe that B sounds more polished and ready to publish and pulls the reader in.
a reads like a grocery list. B reads like an exciting story of intrigue and action.
There is more intriguing information hinting at an actual exciting plot in choice "b". Choice "a" is too vague and unexciting.
I think that sounds like a catchy blurb without giving too much away
The third sentence of option A ends with an awkward question mark.
Give a slightly more specific scenario
I think option B is the best because the other doesn't quite make sense because it ends in a statement but has a question mark.
The last sentence in option A doesn't make sense. Option B sounds so much better
It builds suspense better.
I would absolutely say Option B. The first sentence literally made me say "whoa" out loud and I am very interested in this book now! Option A's "web of lies" is a little bit tired/cliche at this point, while Option B is a rather original way to summarize the story.
Sounds more obvious to the readers of these stories.
The second choice is worded in a way that draws me to read the book. I would actually like to find out more about this book!
Option B includes more information and sounds more interesting.
Option B does a better job at building the suspense over what the story is about. It reels me in a little better than Option A, leading me to really want to grab a copy of the book to find out what all the hubbub is actually about.
Much better written and more intriguing
I probably wouldn't read it either way, but B includes less weird information about the plot. It might be nice to know which war this person was a hero in and what time period we're talking about with the book.
I do not like the use of the question mark for the statement in the first question, it makes it sound awkward. The second one also sounds more mysterious.
B sounds more well put together at explaining the synopsis of the story better than A. It gives me a detailed image of my head of what the book is about.
choice b seems to flow better and gives a few more details that make the description seem more suspenseful than the first description.
Sounds better than A.
B is grammatically correct and more interesting.
I dont like the question at the end of A.
It sounds funny
Option B seems more descriptive and less generic. The blurb is detailed enough to provide insight into the story, but it doesn't give too much away. Option A seems very stereotypical.
Sounds a little more interesting.
This blurb is more succinct and to the point, which is important when trying to get someone's attention to purchase a book.
A reveals too much
Seems more exciting, A seems more pretentious.
The other description makes him sound like a senior citizen.
Sounds more convincing
VERY HELPFUL WITH MARINES CORPS, AND HISTORY
The question mark at the end of A is very awkward.
Option B grabbed my attention more.
I like the wording in B as it is more cryptic and makes me think more; A isn't bad, but B has a slight edge
I like B it sound more professionally writen.
the grammara in A bugged me. but really, neither one seems to fit the title. I like the setup premise better on B.
Seemed to fit better.
I am more intrigued with this one
A war hero is already considered to be older in age and this becomes redundant when said twice in option A. Although I did find the tone of option A to be engaging.
It drew my curiosity, Made me want to open the book and Read a random page to see if it was interesting.
B is more concise and well put together. Easier to read and understand than A.
The blurb makes the book sound more interesting than option A.
Option B sounds more intriguing and makes me more curious about the book. I really like how the location of the book is included in the blurb, as that is part of why I am more curious about the book. Actually, now I want to buy it, so when will it go on sale?