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Which book "blurb" works best on the back cover of Wrinkled Heartbeats?

Option A

An old war hero is caught in a web of money-laundering, lies, and deadly secrets.
A generous offer to buy his luxury home includes an expiration date on his life.
The only person who can save him is the person hired to kill him?


141/200 votes

Full Poll Results

Published Oct 11, 2015
Public

Which book "blurb" works best on the back cover of Wrinkled Heartbeats?

200 Respondents General Population

Option A

An old war hero is caught in a web of money-laundering, lies, and deadly secrets.
A generous offer to buy his luxury home includes an expiration date on his life.
The only person who can save him is the person hired to kill him?


141 votes
Option B

A generous offer to buy a war hero’s luxury home in Florida includes an expiration date on his life.
The most famous military retreat in Marine Corps history becomes a surprising metaphor for survival in the tropical paradise of the Palm Beaches.


59 votes

Responses

Responses to Option A
1
Sounds more interesting.
2
This makes the premise of the book clear to me.
3
B is too abstract.
4
It has more intrigue. The second paragraph in Option B doesn't give any information to the relation to the main character.
5
more appealing, more interesting, makes me want to read more than choice b
6
Option A is more engaging and interesting. Option B starting point does not catch my eye
7
more intriguing
8
Sounds very interesting!
9
Option A sounds more interesting. It makes me more likely to want to read it.
10
More intriguing
11
Option A sounds more interesting. Option B didn't say anything about the money-laundering, lies, and deadly secrets. Option A makes me want to know more about the story.
12
In Option B, the description of mostly the setting doesn't make it sound as interesting as Option A. Option A offers more insight into the plot, and you get a better idea of the kind of book you will be reading.
13
The words "wrinkled heartbeat" matches option A more as the ending of the story is about a heartbeat (life) being jeopardized.
14
Option B provides little to no intrigue and mystery while Option B provides both of these reasonably well.
15
I chose option A because it seems to be a little more descriptive and gives me a better idea of the story. The information it contains is more relevant to quick synopsis.
16
Option A just does not flow. Odd wording in the first sentence, but it has FAR more intrigue than option B. B seems to be a real estate ad.
17
The opening paragraph is more attention grabbing
18
It implies there will be some action. The other one sounds less exciting.
19
Option A is the best because it provides a little more entertaining type detail in a way that makes the book sound interesting. Option B sounds more dry like the book is mostly about military and metaphors. I think this might hinder sales of the book.
20
Short paragraphs feel more direct and engaging. The final question is intriguing.
21
Option A seems more inviting to the imagination. Option B seems somewhat boring in it's description.
22
Sounds interesting and informative
23
A is more suspenseful and makes the book sound more interesting. B doesn't inspire the interest in the book that A does
24
it is much more interesting and intriguing.
25
Definitely more intriguing
26
tells a little more about the plot and less about the locale
27
Its's more interesting this way. The other blurb kind of gave me the lost feeling.
28
They're both similar but I think option A adds a bit more to make me want to read the book while B seems just to describe.
29
Gives a clearer description of the main character the likely antagonist.
30
B is too wordy.
31
Seems to have more action a allure and any other one also seems like something that can keep my attention
32
I LIKE THIS ONE BEST
33
Option A gets me more interested and is far more intriguing.
34
A is concise and clear. B doesn't seem to transition from first sentence to second as logically.
35
Neither is very clear but this one is the better of the two.
36
The focus on the war hero's lies and secrets makes "Blurb" A sound more exciting and intriguing. It gives just a little bit of background without giving too much away, and ropes you in at the start with the promise of mystery and intrigue.
37
I think it's more clear
38
sounds cool
39
Opening with old war hero is more captivating instead of the seemingly coy sales pitchy ...generous offer.
40
it makes me want to read this book
41
Although Option A seems to be a bit cliche, I would say that it reads a bit more smoothly. It is easier to focus on compared to Option B. I would even go as far to say that Option A gives the reader more of an idea of what might be going on as well.
42
Option A creates more suspense for the reader.
43
It's more intriguing and less confusing.
44
It's more dramatic and suspenseful.
45
I think this choice gives the reader a sense of mystery and excitement. Choice B sounds more like a history book and may appeal to less people.
46
The right side is more exciting and makes me want to read more. However, I did want to point out that the last should have a period or an exclamation point at the end.
47
There are serious problems with both options - neither sounds written by a human being; they sound slightly scrambled/altered by a machine. Option A is more gripping; this version of the summary is definitely less tedious than option B. Option A, however, needs to be checked for grammar consistency. Why does it end with a question mark?
48
more personal
49
Choice a grabbed me from the beginning. I think this will get more people to read the book.
50
Scandal is more interesting.
51
This blurb is much more eye-catching and interesting than choice B
52
This 'blurb' just seems overall to be more interesting and more appealing to me.
53
it is more descriptive
54
Sounds more intriguing
55
Makes it sound more fast paced and mysterious.
56
Option B seems to make the story more military based
57
Option A has all of what I find interesting in a story. Its got crime, drama, death, illegal activity. It just sounds like a very captivating story.
58
Option A is more intriguing. However, it shouldn't end in a question mark, as written.
59
sounds more intriguing
60
It tells you more about the plot of the book and makes it sound more exciting.
61
This one is more intriguing. It makes me want to read the book more than the other statement.
62
sounds more intriguing, makes me more likely to be interested in reading
63
I feel like option A does.
64
This sounds the most exciting! I would like to include the bit about it being in FL though.
65
Last sentence in option A draws readers in more with intrigue.
66
A sounded more interesting. B sounded dry and boring.
67
I think Option A's "blurb" is more attention grabbing! Readers will be very excited to read a book with that kind of an introduction. Option B's "blurb" was just as good. But, I think Option A's blurb will get more attention, than Option B.
68
Because it features information of both an old man ("wrinkled") and speaking on life and death ("heartbeats").
69
a better description, sounds much more promising as far as drama
70
Makes it sound slightly more interesting.
71
n/a
72
This option sounds better
73
There's nothing to grab your attention with Option B. Option A on the other hand is quite intriguing. Definitely go with A.
74
Tells me more about what I can expect and the characters, I'm intrigued.
75
option A grabbed me from the start.
76
Blurb A creates a lot of mystery and intrigue. B is very matter of fact and doesn't grab one's attention as well.
77
Choice A seems more exciting and action packed. I would read a book with this description.
78
The three initial descriptions sound get your attention more quickly than B. The twist with the person hired to kill him sounds interesting as well.
79
Choice A seems intriguing, with some good questions for a mystery.
80
It sounds more interesting and goes well with the title more than the first option. It gives more detail and sounds like it leads to an interesting twist of tales.
81
much more suspense
82
It reads easier than option B. Very clear what the book is about.
83
A sounded better to me. I didn't care that the house was in Florida or the metaphor. that was in example B
84
Sounds more interesting.
85
Option A's blurb is much more detailed and writen in a way that grabs my attention. Option B seems forced, like the author didn't really know what to say.
86
It's more to the point and lets the reader know what the story is about.
87
Option A is more descriptive and catches your attention more than Option B. It makes you curious and wonder what happens. After reading it, it made me want to read the book to find out what happens.
88
sounds more interesting
89
I think choice A just leaves the reader with more sense of suspense. I don't know that I'd end it in a question mark though...
90
I am more interested in A than B.
91
Option A was more ear grabbing to me and made me want to know more.
92
Very suspenseful description which makes me want t read more
93
More narrative, fits better for a novel.
94
option A makes me want to read the book. i just don't care for the other one.
95
More descriptive. The reference to a military retreat in B really has nothing to do with it.
96
B is so unclear.
97
Option A draws you in a lot more than Option B - it's a lot more suspenseful and makes you want to see why the person sent to kill him might want to help save him.
98
Option A flows better. Makes the point of the story clearer.
99
Option A sounds a little more exciting and could incite someone to want to read the contents of the book.
100
because its seems more realistic and this suites the book just right.
101
It seems more personable and relaxed.
102
I prefer A. It caught my interest and made me curious about the book. B...not so much. B sounds more like a "guy" story while A sounds more interesting to a female. My opinion anyhow!
103
Option A is my choice. It adds sometime to the intrigue of the story and makes me want to read the book. Who wants to kill this guy and is he/she willing to turn around and save his life?
104
Makes it sound more dramatic and suspenseful. Hint's at plot points but doesnt spoil.
105
Option B isnt clear, and is confusing.
106
Sounds more suspenseful
107
A gives a very good precis of what the book is about and invites you in to read more (I want to read more, anyway!) B is a bit stiff, IMHO.
108
It sounds more intriguing.
109
more intriguing
110
I like the phrasing and how it ends in a question. It seems more personal, like the story is about the people, not the offer on the home.
111
Draws me in more than the other and makes me want to read the book.
112
sounds more exciting
113
I like the way this is broken up better
114
Option A is better written and easier to understand.
115
This one sounds much more exciting
116
makes it seem more interesting. option B doesnt catch my attention
117
Choice A sounds more mysterious and more likely to entice someone to read the book. It has a lot more buzzwords that attract attention
118
The other option made my eyes glaze over.
119
Option A creates more intrigue and is a better header bc it makes me want to read the book a lot more than option B
120
Option B is too wordy, it makes it hard to read and comprehend.
121
This blurb definitely caught my attention. It's even got me interested in the book already. B just seems generic.
122
This other option leaves me wondering what they are talking about. My choice is much clearer.
123
More exciting--leads up to the person hired to kill him instead of just saying it at first. Makes the book appear more interesting.
124
Option A is about circumstances that everybody can relate to. For option B, I don't know anything about Marine Corps history or Palm Beaches, so the second part doesn't resonate with me.
125
Very detailed on what this book is about. A great selection of words that grabs my attention and makes me want to read this book.
126
I think this one has a better cliff-hanger/hook.
127
The blurb is a little vague leaving me wanting more.
128
It gives more information about the story. The other one is a little vague.
129
More catching with the first sentence. The first sentence f B is boring
130
it starts off more interesting with words that grab your attention
131
There's more mystery in A.
132
Option A is MUCH more compelling, interesting, and INTRIGUING! I'd sure want to learn more on that one!!!
133
This one makes it sound like a fast paced, page turning thriller.
134
I like A because it is more descriptive. I have a strong idea of what the book is about.
135
Sounds more exciting
136
it seems like a mystery. you get involved in the story and you want to know what happens next. it draws you in.
137
The way option b starts out is a little confusing. I had to re-read it to fully understand it.
138
Talking about the war hero vs the offer is more appealing.
139
The sentences in A are more succinct. B begins with a run-on sentence that will lose most people after the first few words.
140
I prefer option A because it offers a better feel of what the story is about and offers more mystery and intrigue.
141
Option A, better grabs my attention and sets the stage for the book.
Responses to Option B
1
Option B sounds more like a blurb, and is more appealing.
2
Option B makes it intriguing without giving away too much.
3
Well, first, Option A is awkwardly worded and punctuated. Is the last sentence really a question? Second, Option B mentions the Marine Corps will which catch a lot of people's attention as the MC are a very respected institution.
4
B seems more action packed
5
B has better flow.
6
Option B is better because Option A gives too much away.
7
Option B makes more sense
8
i like this one
9
Easier to understand.
10
Seems more grammatically correct. The first one ends in a question, but it's not really a question.
11
When I read the location (*Florida), and the details that it is a Marine Corps military retreat and the fact it is a metaphor, I feel like I have more of a grasp on what the book will be about. In Option A, I didn't like that it ended with a question either, when I didn't feel I had enough information for the question to be intriguing to me.
12
A is too cliche.
13
This one sounds more interesting and attention grabbing.
14
Why is there a question mark at the end of A?
15
I dislike the the question at the end of A and believe that B sounds more polished and ready to publish and pulls the reader in.
16
a reads like a grocery list. B reads like an exciting story of intrigue and action.
17
There is more intriguing information hinting at an actual exciting plot in choice "b". Choice "a" is too vague and unexciting.
18
I think that sounds like a catchy blurb without giving too much away
19
The third sentence of option A ends with an awkward question mark.
20
Give a slightly more specific scenario
21
I think option B is the best because the other doesn't quite make sense because it ends in a statement but has a question mark.
22
The last sentence in option A doesn't make sense. Option B sounds so much better
23
It builds suspense better.
24
great book
25
I would absolutely say Option B. The first sentence literally made me say "whoa" out loud and I am very interested in this book now! Option A's "web of lies" is a little bit tired/cliche at this point, while Option B is a rather original way to summarize the story.
26
Sounds more obvious to the readers of these stories.
27
The second choice is worded in a way that draws me to read the book. I would actually like to find out more about this book!
28
Option B includes more information and sounds more interesting.
29
Option B does a better job at building the suspense over what the story is about. It reels me in a little better than Option A, leading me to really want to grab a copy of the book to find out what all the hubbub is actually about.
30
Much better written and more intriguing
31
I probably wouldn't read it either way, but B includes less weird information about the plot. It might be nice to know which war this person was a hero in and what time period we're talking about with the book.
32
I do not like the use of the question mark for the statement in the first question, it makes it sound awkward. The second one also sounds more mysterious.
33
B sounds more well put together at explaining the synopsis of the story better than A. It gives me a detailed image of my head of what the book is about.
34
choice b seems to flow better and gives a few more details that make the description seem more suspenseful than the first description.
35
Sounds better than A.
36
B is grammatically correct and more interesting.
37
I dont like the question at the end of A.
38
It sounds funny
39
Option B seems more descriptive and less generic. The blurb is detailed enough to provide insight into the story, but it doesn't give too much away. Option A seems very stereotypical.
40
Sounds a little more interesting.
41
This blurb is more succinct and to the point, which is important when trying to get someone's attention to purchase a book.
42
A reveals too much
43
Seems more exciting, A seems more pretentious.
44
The other description makes him sound like a senior citizen.
45
Sounds more convincing
46
VERY HELPFUL WITH MARINES CORPS, AND HISTORY
47
The question mark at the end of A is very awkward.
48
Option B grabbed my attention more.
49
I like the wording in B as it is more cryptic and makes me think more; A isn't bad, but B has a slight edge
50
Sounds better.
51
I like B it sound more professionally writen.
52
the grammara in A bugged me. but really, neither one seems to fit the title. I like the setup premise better on B.
53
Seemed to fit better.
54
I am more intrigued with this one
55
A war hero is already considered to be older in age and this becomes redundant when said twice in option A. Although I did find the tone of option A to be engaging.
56
It drew my curiosity, Made me want to open the book and Read a random page to see if it was interesting.
57
B is more concise and well put together. Easier to read and understand than A.
58
The blurb makes the book sound more interesting than option A.
59
Option B sounds more intriguing and makes me more curious about the book. I really like how the location of the book is included in the blurb, as that is part of why I am more curious about the book. Actually, now I want to buy it, so when will it go on sale?

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A

Votes by demographic segment

B


Gender
70%
Male (87)
29%
70%
Female (113)
29%

Age
-
3-17 (None)
-
64%
18-34 (111)
35%
76%
35-49 (51)
23%
75%
50-64 (33)
24%
100%
65+ (5)
0%

Income
66%
$0-30k (81)
33%
70%
$30-60k (67)
29%
75%
$60-100k (45)
24%
85%
$100k+ (7)
14%

Ethnicity
69%
White (165)
30%
69%
Black (13)
30%
90%
Asian (10)
10%
85%
Hispanic (7)
14%
60%
Other (5)
40%

Education
86%
High School (30)
13%
68%
College (138)
31%
62%
Grad School (32)
37%
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